[Claim]
The claim I'm making on the text. How Kids are brain washed and taking away from their family.
Beah was alone had to take care of his self with no idea where his family was.
The claim I'm making on the text. How Kids are brain washed and taking away from their family.
Beah was alone had to take care of his self with no idea where his family was.
solomon son was no where to be found, when he found his wife and kids he son wasnt there he was heart broken.
[Thesis]
They brain wash the kids in lots of ways .
solomons son was brain washed, to hate his father.
Questions I'm Exploring
What are the kids feeling?
Why were so many innocent people killed?
Academic Articles
I'm research sierra leone history, so it will give me a little more inside on everything that happened.
Millord,
ReplyDeleteAs I have repeatedly stated during the semester, you need to go into more depth on your ideas. You also have to use more precise feelings, and not assume that your audience knows who, what, when, etc. that you are talking about! For instance, What kids are talking about in terms of "What are the kids feeling?" Define your subject, and what they are being affected by.
As far as your academic article - I asked for the specific name of the article you intended to use. It is great that you are looking into the country's history, but what in particular in the history?
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